Kirrivath: Superhero

Songbirds and Superheroes

2018-02-02 @ 07:37am
tags: guitar unvalentines metoo
Been trying to write this one for a while... here goes again... again. V3 after hanging out with Donald Quan.

Short VLOG for this will be on Kirrivath's Patreon.

Drop D makes for way better weird chords. Yay!

Updated with the debut performance video! Please no comments on the guitar playing, I'm a singer haha.

Lyrics

1.
We used to fly in my livingroom
Then you went away
I used to sing to you those old showtunes
My mama sang to me

Pre:
Now I see you fly among the stars
And I'm here on the ground bleeding

Chorus:
We were young we were strong
We were superheroes
We were birds we were planes
We thought nothing could defeat us

2.
When you were five your hamster died
I comforted you
You get to sing on the Broadway stage
Showtunes old and new

Pre, Chorus

Bridge:
What happened to my best friend
I call you Mr Famous now
Charming, entitled
Net worth of millions
He said you said
He said you said
That unless I would belong to you
That you would watch me die

3.
We used to fly in my livingroom
Songbirds of a feather
Then you chose to be a villain
Not heroes together

Comments

janeg - 2018-02-03 @ 01:21am
Very curious to,learn the musical style!
Chagall Sierra - 2018-02-03 @ 07:35am
This draft of the lyrics doesn't work either but it's much closer. Sigh. Getting there.
wingspell - 2018-02-04 @ 08:25am
Chords flowing better with this new version of the lyrics. 2billionty rewrites.
GardeningAngel - 2018-02-13 @ 10:21pm
Ooooo, I got chills reading this, esp. the last verse. I'm familiar with a lot of the relationship dynamics you describe here (at least, as I interpret them), and it feels validating to see them put into words. Strong stuff.
Chagall Sierra - 2018-02-15 @ 07:09am
Think the bridge still needs work. It's normalish. Thoughts? Thank you for the kind comments, @janeg and @gardeningangel1 - it's updated with a rough live performance now.
Alex "metalfoot" - 2018-02-15 @ 04:30pm
The melody simply soars like a songbird... the story is sad. A powerful song overall!
Lady C - 2018-02-22 @ 08:39pm
Love the gentle melody, even your delicate guitar playing. It suits the song in my humble opinion. Also really like your pauses, and placement of them. Sometimes many rewrites are necessary, and there is no shame in it.

Tinder

Chagall
FAWM 2016

Liner Notes

Hmm. Interesting.

Lyrics

Every day I feel pain I remember nothing's the same
Every breath too much stress you've made it all a mess

Are you a demon?
Dark eyes
Dark hair
A ready smile
Takes my air

You may as well be agent orange
Or iron and a match
Cause I'm dying inside
A fact you didn't catch

You may as well be kryptonite
Or flint and tinder
Cause I'm going up in flames
A sanctified sinner

It was nothing to you but who am I stained with rue
It was true love to me but it seems I must be free

Are you a demon?
Your hands
Your touch
Awkward laugh
Means too much

You may as well be kryptonite
Or flint and tinder
Cause I'm going up in flames
A sanctified sinner

You may as well be agent orange
Or iron and a match
Cause I'm dying inside
A fact you didn't catch

Or did you

Gotta stay strong
Gotta stay strong
Stay alive stay alive
Don't ask you to
Stay

Comments

@metalfoot 2 weeks

Powerful lyrical effect to these words. Curious to see what sort of musical magic you might make!
@electrocelte 3 weeks

Nice... wrote a song called "Lady is Kryptonite"... it's out there...somewhere...
@jessica14 3 weeks

Very intensense and beautiful lyrics! Would be great to put this to music... Great job!
@marvsmooth 3 weeks

I think there are bits of a few heroes in here!
@kirrivath 3 weeks

Gonna pull a Taylor Swift and not say who this is about. Maybe more than one guy. Just to confuse things. ^-^ @popmythology
@popmythology 3 weeks

Great lyrics! Because of the title, at first I thought this song was somehow related to that Tinder dating app, lol. It's definitely a bit abstract as a superhero song, as you were saying, but I can see how a former significant other (if I'm right that that's what this is about) could have been a kind of kryptonite to your Supergirl.
@cts 3 weeks

I've read this a few times and I kept trying to determine if there was a specific super hero you were alluding to. I thought it might be the Ghost Rider, but after read #4, it became clear to me this write is much bigger than that. Great work here!
@marvsmooth 3 weeks

Ooh, I really like the writing here so much.

There is a definite rhythm to the writing here, and I really want to hear this set to music.

Fabulous writing!
@ladycarolynhyde 3 weeks

Wow girl, love the depth of the lyrics, and, to me at least, the imagery of you as a superhero and the possible thought processes they think, the feelings they feel because they have such an important and often thankless job. Totally captures what it's like. Can also hear ominous music but with a shred of hope stitched through it because of this passage "gotta stay strong gotta stay strong, stay alive stay alive, don't ask you to stay." that is so powerful. love the duality. great job!
@nadia 3 weeks

wow, i want to hear this with music! you have some really great imagery here and i love your repetition of "you may as well be..." great effort--now put it to some rocking music!!!
@nancyrost 3 weeksreport abuse

"Sanctified sinner" is a wonderful alliterative paradox, very catchy. I can hear the rhythm in these words, and it rocks.