Kirrivath: Wonder and Stars (FAWM 2016)

Wonder and Stars

Chagall Sierra & Bonita Storm Chavez
FAWM 2016

Written in response to the death of David Bowie and quite a few other inspiring musicians who've left us lately.

Liner Notes

Started pre-FAWM with a couple of fragments. One was in response to the death of Bowie and the other, written by a Facebook friend a few months ago and placed into my fragments file.

"See the stardust falling down
See the dark side of the moon
See the signs of life on other planets
You were taken too soon

Once I was a child staring in open wonder"
My fragment

"We are here to feel
We are here to heal"
by Bonita Storm Chavez

Combined that with a dream and finally sat down to take a write.

Lyrics

Once I was a child staring in open wonder
Upon the fields of stars that filled my sight
Tall pine trees whispered thunder
Pebbles scattered like memories

We are here to feel
We are here to heal
To restore the glory
Of what's real
Wonder & stars
Wonder & stars
Stardust marks the seal
Starlight illuminates
Our frail humanity
Our frail humility

Walk the dark side of the moon
See the signs of life extraterrestrial
Are you coming back soon
You were taken you are gone

We are here to feel
We are here to heal
To restore the glory
Of what's real
Wonder & stars
Wonder & stars
Stardust marks the seal
Starlight illuminates
Our frail humanity
Our frail humility

See the stardust falling down
Dream the ghosts beside us floating
This is seeded you have sown
In the river never twice

We are here to feel
We are here to heal
To restore the glory
Of what's real
Wonder & stars
Wonder & stars
Stardust marks the seal
Starlight illuminates
Our frail humanity
Our frail humility

All the stars are falling from the sky
And I never had the chance to touch them
Haven't had the chance to fly
You're taking a piece of my heart with you

Comments

@reggiestyte 1 week

Awesome tribute. "Awesome" for imagery, that is. Nice contrast of humanity & humility to end the chorus. Love the line "tall pine trees whispered thunder". (I typed that before reading other comments & still love it) Nice work! I highly encourage you to develop some melody for this.
@kirrivath 4 weeks

Hmm @tsunamidaily you're somewhat right about the pine trees. Evergreen is too rushed though, especially as whispered is already rushed.
@tsunamidaily 5 weeks

it flows. the first verse gets me out of the flow with the third line being short. the ending line is fine short. i hear a missing anapest at the beginning of the third line, like "evergreen"-- "evergreen pine trees whispered thunder," though i would not presume that is correct or that there is a problem once fitted to the intended music. the rest just flows so well that that one line stands out to me, i guess. i like how you have the rhymes on the first and third lines in parts instead of the usual 2 and 4. it really gives it a different feel. i agree that "other planets" will sing much better than "extraterrestrial." it is simply an ungodly word. good job. let me know if it gets demoed.
@ladycarolynhyde 6 weeks

The is amazing, I would love to help you set this to music anytime you like. Seriously hit home for me.
@mojosarmy 6 weeks

Well done!
@darcistrutt 6 weeks

Pretty lyric. I was struck with the fact scientists teach we are all made of star stuff. So that starlight does truly illuminate and mark our frail humanity.
@tunecat 6 weeks

Yeah.. that seems really cool..
@tawny249 6 weeks

Hi, this is very pretty. I like the sentiment and the phrasing. My only suggestion, oddly enough, is that your original "signs of life on other planets" flows better as a song lyric than "extraterrestrial." The word doesn't lend itself to singing in general. : P If you have a special plan for it, ignore me, but otherwise you might consider switching it back. Everything else is very cool as is. Looking forward to music.
@donna 6 weeks

Absolutely lovely, Chagall. Such tender imagery. I love the repetition.
@popmythology 6 weeksreport abuse

This is very beautiful, Chagall, a moving tribute. With music and your voice, it could be wondrous.